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===== This section effectively bridges the dispersal of the Sovereigns’ ritual memory with the emergence of bureaucratic authority and early economic control. You’re blending history, allegory, and ritual in a way that’s both immersive and symbolic. The rhythm of your prose mirrors the story’s theme—breath, walking, memory—all contrasted against ledger and stone. ===== If you want, I can draft a slightly tightened version of this 6.2–6.3 section, keeping your symbols, clans, and trade routes, while clarifying the timeline, reinforcing the Lion motif, and subtly foreshadowing the ritual repetitions you plan later. This would make the reading flow a touch more smoothly without losing your lyrical style. Do you want me to do that?
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