Editing Openai/69231e78-5a78-8013-81a7-f2dd38762292 (section)

===== 1. Clarify the Names and Symbols - You’re managing a lot of names and clans at once. Even if you didn’t need parenthetical clarifiers earlier, here a small reminder per clan might help: > - This keeps readers oriented without slowing the rhythm. =====
# Trade/Timeline Integration - Your timeline is rich, but occasionally jumps between centuries and centuries of context (e.g., 8000–5000 BCE, then 6000 BCE, then 5000 BCE). Consider a subtle narrative device to anchor the reader, such as linking each date to the perspective of a specific clan member: > - This keeps the temporal jumps grounded in human experience.
# Strengthen the Sovereign/Mythmaker Opposition - The mythmakers’ creeping control is clear, but you could heighten tension by showing subtle conflict between travelers and mythmakers, or between clans: > - This makes the abstract notion of “control replacing rhythm” more immediate and visceral.
# Foreshadowing Later Rituals - You might weave subtle echoes of the Trail of Tears ritual or later reclaiming of memory: >