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==== - Repetition vs. Pacing: You use repetition intentionally, but at times it can feel overwhelming. For instance, the phrases about molds and reshaping are repeated dozens of times. You could condense some repetitions, allowing the metaphors to hit harder. ==== * Clarity of lineage/sequence: With so many figures, a visual or table-like reference could help readers track which Sovereign became which molded figure across cultures. Even a simple footnote or diagram could reinforce your framework. * Chapter breaks or subheadings: Right now, it’s extremely long. Consider breaking it into smaller sections for each “molded Sovereign” to give readers mental space and increase dramatic impact.
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